Saturday, September 12, 2015

One more night not to worry ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 09/13/15

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My entry this week is from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts. Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son. 

Layne assured her friend Rita that she didn't kidnap her own son and asked Rita to let Dennis spend the night at her house. She wished Justin was there, but she knew she had to handle things on her own, at least for now Dennis would be safe. Layne's alone in the apartment and nervous. Justin comes back to town earlier than expected and knocks on Layne's door.

  (the following has been edited to fit)  ...and now the eight nine ten:

There was a knock at the door and Layne was sure she didn't want to open it.

Justin's muffled voice came through the door, "Layne?"

"Justin," Layne threw open the door and flung herself into his arms, "you're back early."

"If I had realized this was the kind of greeting I would get, I would have done my best to get back even sooner." He looked towards the bedroom door, "uh, where's Dennis?"

"He's staying at a friend's place tonight, I'm sorry, I didn't expect you back until tomorrow."

"When will he be back?"

"Tomorrow morning, before school."

Justin smiled, "if I promise to be out of here before he arrives, can I spend the night with you?"

"I was hoping you might," Layne decided to enjoy the night; she'd tell him about her strange visit tomorrow.

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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts

Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.


I probably won't get to many snippets before Wednesday night due to the
Jewish holiday of Rosh 
Hashanah (starts Sunday at sundown).
HERE if you are interested in the Meaning of the High Holy Days.
Ketivah v’chatima tovah”(כתיבה וחתימה טובה)
“A good inscription and sealing [in the Book of Life].

From our home to yours, I wish ALL of you
a wondrous year ahead filled with happiness and joys abundant.
May you always be blessed with health and prosperity.
(& lots of book sales!)
by the way, Mon, 14 September 2015 = 1st of Tishrei, 5776

Happy New Year!


Anonymous said...

Since she's fearful about her husband's return, I imagine she's glad Justin will be there overnight.

Sunshine City Girl said...

I'm feeling like this story could become either sexy or very, very tense soon...great job!

Iris B said...

I hope she'll enjoy the night with him first, before she opens up about the happenings the previous day.

Teresa Cypher said...

Well, they're finally both going in the same direction at the same time. But I see bad things ahead. I wonder how safe Dennis is where he's at.

L'shanah tovah to you and yours. :-)I hope you enjoy your celebration, Chelle.

Kim M said...

Happy New Year, Chelle.
Some uninterrupted grown-up-time sounds like an excellent idea!

gemma parkes said...

I can feel her angst and uncertainty, for now Justin can help her relax.

Charmaine Gordon said...

A bit of romance before the main event always helps. This snippet stirs the blood for what lies ahead.

Happy holidays to you and yours, dear friend.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

I'm glad he's there, and think these two deserve a little time alone. :)

Veronica Scott said...

Loved the snippet - these two have progressed so far since he story began for them! I have a feeling things might get ugly with that exhusband though - really enjoying the story. Great ecxerpt!

Elaine Cantrell said...

Uh oh. I think she should have told him tonight.

FCEtier said...

Isn't that like burning the candle on each end?

JTsuruoka said...

This is a strong piece-- really sets the table for what's coming. It feels very live and very real.

Unknown said...

I love the flirty way he asks if he can stay.

Unknown said...

Ooh, bold move Justin. Hmm, anxiously waiting for her response. Love it!

diannehartsock said...

This might be an interesting night. :)

Linda said...

I think she better tell him about the strange visit now. I'm sure they should be expecting company.

Anonymous said...

Ah, perfect timing on his part to ease her worry. I get the feeling she should enjoy the night while she can, because once Justin finds out about the visitor, I get the feeling he's going to get angry as all hell and over protective. Nice snippet.