Saturday, September 5, 2015

Stranger danger ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 09/06/15

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My entry this week is from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts. Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son. 

Just before Justin is called back to work to meet with an important supplier, he tells Layne he'd like to move her and Dennis to an apartment near him so he can keep them safe and take care of them; Layne feels he's moving too fast. He promises to return in a few days. The next day Layne gets Dennis to school and goes to work. (Layne is a receptionist at a realty office; her friend Rita is the office manager)

  (the following has been edited to fit)  ...and now the eight nine ten:

When Layne got to work she was feeling very unsettled, a situation she blamed Justin for. Her boss went to a seminar in a nearby town and the office was short-staffed. A strange man came into the office, loud and demanding to see her boss; an agent offered to help and the irate man complained about "Miss Gillette".

Rita came in during the fracas and managed to calm the agitated man down; he wouldn't leave his name or any message when he left.

Layne suddenly got up and looked back over her desk, "is there any place here that says my name?"

"You're wearing a name tag."

"My name tag only has my first name, how did he know my last name?" She looked troubled, "Rita, I'm not an unwed mother, I think my husband may be looking for Dennis."

"You're married?"

"Can Dennis stay with you tonight?"

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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts

Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.


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Ed Hoornaert said...

Ah, the pot stirs some more. I hope she takes Justin up on his offer soon, but probably not soon enough to avoid more trouble, right?

Kim M said...

I suspect that this will be very strong motivation for her to move. Which as we all know is what really has to happen if she and Justin are going to learn to get along.

gemma parkes said...

Ooh, sounds like she may be in danger, better move quick!

Charmaine Gordon said...

We are all invested in your story so make sure she and her son are safe or else!This is quite a journey, Chelle. Wonderful.

Anonymous said...

That is pretty scary. I hope Rita lends a helping hand.
Great snippet.

Veronica Scott said...

An ominous development and I'm sure there'll be more trouble ahead. Enjoying the story, very tense, waiting for whatever will happen next! Great snippet.

Teresa Cypher said...

Uh oh! Trouble ahead. Loads of tension in this scene, Chelle. Good snippet!

Iris B said...

Oh boy ... i hope the boy is safe, and I hope she'll take up on Justin's offer to mover her and her son closer to him.

Elaine Cantrell said...

This would scare the pants off any parent, especially in this case. Well done.

PT said...

I'm curious to know who the man was. Surely if it was her husband she'd have recognized him and he'd have recognized her...

JTsuruoka said...

"Fracas", is one of my very favorite words in the English language. I appreciate how the conflict with the customer kind of foreshadows the conflicts to come.

Anonymous said...

Uh... Oh... Things are about to get ugly, I can see it now. Great snippet, and great set up of conflict to come. I get the feeling she's going to take up Justin's offer now. Can't wait to see what happens!

Linda said...

This is very suspicious. I think it's time to run, I can see the danger approaching.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

I fear for her. I bet she's thinking about taking Justin's offer now. :)

Unknown said...

Ooh, chills here my friend. That was amazing writing! Nice touch with the name tag also.

Unknown said...

Quick of her to notice, but this means her creep of a husband has found her, doesn't it? The man might not have seen her, but surely he had it confirmed that she works there.