Saturday, January 16, 2016

It's a date ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 01/17/16

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I'm sharing snippets from Stormy Weather, one of the short stories in The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero collection. 

Last week Bruce implored on Debbie's good nature to allow him to ride the hurricane out with her in the hotel lobby where she was staying. This week, despite her wariness, she concedes. This is the last snippet from Stormy Weather, one of the short stories in my anthology. I hope you've enjoyed.

Creative editing alert!  Here are eight more lines... 

She chuckled, “I meant don’t you have to take care of your own place in this weather?”
“I live in one of the older hotels down the beach, people are just going to be hanging out in the lobby there.” He pretended to pout, “so can I come to your hotel lounge and ride out the hurricane?”
Sighing heavily, she surrendered, “yeah.”
“So I’ll pick you up and escort you downstairs tonight?”
“No, I’ll meet you downstairs in the lounge,” Debbie wasn’t sure what to make of this guy; she definitely didn’t want him thinking that he might be invited into her room.
“Okay,” his eyes met and held hers for a few seconds, “I will see you tonight.”
She didn’t understand why the warmth of his gaze felt like he had just stroked her.

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The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero is a single author collection of short stories featuring Introduction, Pussycat Tails, Holiday Happiness, Not Alone, I Swear That Raccoon Just Knocked on the Door, Stormy Weather, A Mother’s Love, More Than a Friend, The Meeting, The Vacation and a special bonus section.

Stormy Weather
The ominous skies and howling winds of a hurricane lead to an unexpected and warmhearted friendship.



Teresa Cypher said...

I dunno. He's borderline pushy. I'd be hearing alarm bells. I hope he redeems himself later in the story. :-)

Unknown said...

Smart of her to meet him in the lounge. He's super-pushy so she needs to be careful. I'm wondering how their evening together will go.

Naomi Shaw said...

There is definitely an attraction there. Great snippet

Veronica Scott said...

I like her caution because I agree with others who have commented on how pushy he is. This excerpt hints at quite the compelling story to come!

Anonymous said...

As my sister just said about her son's new girlfriend: "(S)he's no shrinking violet."

Charmaine Gordon said...

Go for it, big guy and why not. A hurricane is a hurricane. By the way, GF, I've had Vertigo for a week and it's awful. Maybe worse than a hurricane.

Unknown said...

I'm not too sure about his intentions, here. He keeps pushing for a 'yes,' and I get the feeling he'll do so later, too.