Saturday, May 9, 2015

Get Out of Here! ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 05/10/15

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My entry this week is from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts. Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son. 

Last week Justin confronted Layne with his bombshell announcement. When the boy appears behind his mother, she yells at him and demands that he lock himself in his bedroom, meanwhile she attempts to prevent Justin from barging in. Laynes son is named Dennis. (btw, a reference to nosy neighbors was edited out last week)

...and now the eight:

She slowly turned her head to look at a photograph of Dennis that was sitting on the top of her television set and made the comparison to the man standing in front of her.
Suddenly she screamed at him and began to beat at his chest with her clenched fists, "Get out, get out of here, get the hell out of my home!"
"Layne, calm down," Justin tried to defend himself from her blows; he grabbed at her hands and tried to hold the struggling woman away from him.
He heard a door open.
"Should I call the police, Layne," Mrs. Addamson called across the hallway from the protection of her own doorway.
Justin wanted to see the boy again, he wanted this beautiful lunatic to stop attacking him, he didn't want to have to call his lawyer to get him out of jail. "I'll be back," Justin turned on his heel and left. Mrs. Addamson slammed her door as he entered the hallway.

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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts

Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.

Amazon Customer Review

5.0 out of 5 stars Good book reviewed by  R. M. E.
Two people brought together through a very interesting twist. They have a very passionate love affair, lots of suspense and satisfying ending.

Author Bio
Chelle Cordero writes stories of Passion and Suspense. Vanilla Heart Publishing has published ten Cordero novels and a short-story collection: Bartlett's Rule; His Lucky Charm; Within the Law; Courage of the Heart; Final Sin; Hostage Heart; A Chaunce of Riches; Common Bond, Tangled Hearts; Hyphema; and Karma Visited. VHP just published The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero featuring several short stories which attest to Chelle's unique range of writing abilities. She is currently working on her next novel and promises another action packed adventure and heartwarming love story. Chelle has been writing both fiction and non-fiction for the bulk of her adult life and has been with Vanilla Heart Publishing since early +2008.

Her books have earned many plaudits which includes: Bartlett's Rule was named one of Carolyn Howard-Johnson's Top Ten Reads for 2009; Final Sin was an Honorable Mention in the Fiction Category of the 2010 NY Book Festival and a 2009 Pushcart Prize nominee; Hyphema won the Dec 9, 2011 Friday Book Cover Vote on the Shades of Love website; A Chaunce of Riches was Winner of D. Renee Bagby's readers' choice for The Best Overall First Chapter, April 2010; Hostage Heart, Final Sin and A Chaunce of Riches had top ten finishes in the 2009 PREDITORS & EDITORS READERS' POLL; Chelle had three (3) Top Ten Finishes in the 2014 PREDITORS & EDITORS READERS' POLL for her weekly Kindle Writing Workshop Living, Breathing, Writing, her promo blog Potpourri Parlor, and a blog post "Can We Talk?". Final Sin and Hyphema were recently cited by EMSWorld as recommended EMS-themed books to read. Chelle was also featured in "50 Great Writers You Should Be Reading" published by The Author's Show in 2010. 

Chelle Cordero maintains an author's blog at, a promotional blog at, and offers a weekly writing workshop for Kindle Blog subscribers at Her website offers information on all of her books and her appearances. Bloggers and the media are welcome to visit Chelle's media room at with downloadable photos and other information. Previews of Chelle Cordero books are available at


Zoe said...

Great premise and potential for conflict is right there! Looking good.

Unknown said...

Ooh, what is going on with Layne? Love the tension and I hope she calms down enough to tell him what's going on. Great eight! Happy Mother's Day Chelle!

Sarah W said...

What did he think was going to happen?

Perfect excerpt for Mother's Day, Chelle! :)

Anonymous said...

I'm not sure it's fair to call her crazy--he did just spring it on her, what did he think would happen? A hug?

Charmaine Gordon said...

A prank causes this to happen? Some joke. Exciting, Chelle with conflict right from the beginning.

Veronica Scott said...

I think Justin has good sense. I hope Layne can calm down - I get why she's so upset but she'll never be able to cope with this if she doesn't get a handle on her emotions. Very effective excerpt!

Anonymous said...

Intriguing situation going on here.

Elaine Cantrell said...

I love this plot. So interesting.

Iris B said...

Love it. I hope she'll calm down for them to have a talk.

Siobhan Muir said...

He better have a good explanation if he wants to convince her. Good snippet, Chelle. :)

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Great tension in this scene! I'm not sure she's ready to calm down yet. :)

JTsuruoka said...

Very vivid! Rough stuff and easy to follow. The pace works too.

P.T.Wyant said...

Great scene. But, yeah, I think he should have thought things out a bit more before barging into her life.

Anonymous said...

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Chelle!!


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Anonymous said...

Wow, talk about a heart-wrenching surprise. Emotional scene.

Teresa Cypher said...

Her behavior felt very real, Chelle. This must be terrifying for her--to have her son's father walk back into their lives. Nicely done! :-)