Saturday, August 22, 2015

A picnic lunch - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 08/23/15

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My entry this week is from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts. Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son. 

Later that day, after the mall incident, Justin brings Layne and Dennis to the park for a picnic lunch. Dennis is playing at the pond's edge, Justin is keeping a watchful eye on him. Layne is still embarrassed about the mall incident.

  (the following has been edited to fit)  ...and now the eight nine:

"I am so very sorry for the way I acted in the mall."

"Don't worry, being a parent is still new to me, I guess it's spooky when you hear about all the things that can happen to a kid." Justin made sure to keep an eye on Dennis while he spoke.

"It's not just that, I've worried that Charlie was going to try to snatch him ever since he was born."

"But Layne," Justin turned to her, "he hasn't found you in six years; maybe he's not even looking. You left before he even knew if you were pregnant, he probably figures that you would have had an abortion."

"I thought about it, but I kept denying that I was pregnant; by the time I admitted it, I felt pregnant, I couldn't do it anymore." She tossed a glance at her son, "I'm glad I didn't."

"So am I," Justin whispered as he watched her face.

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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts

Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.


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Iris B said...

Quite often common sense goes out the window when the safety of your own child is concerned. Although it might be true that he's not looking for her, the worry is always there ... great snippet!

P.T.Wyant said...

Love that last line. Very sweet.

Unknown said...

Gotta love that Justin. You've created that perfect scene where the reader can feel the happy pause. Very nicely done.

gemma parkes said...

What a tangle, she is bound to be watchful but it sounds like she has a very supportive partner in Justin.

Linda said...

It would be nice if Charlie had forgotten but I'm not sure he is that type of guy.

Unknown said...

Justin's such a good guy. I get the feeling he's surprised he feels attached to the child. Great snippet, Chelle.

Anonymous said...

I get the feeling that we may find out that Layne's ex is indeed after her. It could be a red herring of course.

Elaine Cantrell said...

I'm just waiting for the shoe to drop. The bad guy can't be far behind. Nice foreshadowing.

Veronica Scott said...

Aww, tender scene. and of course we KNOW Charlie is going to show up. Really enjoying the complexity of the story, great snippet.

JTsuruoka said...

Poignant scene. You manage to touch on all of the emotional things going on in your story in one short scene. Very nice.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Tender scene and all for the boy and of course , her. lovely scene with bad things to come.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

I so love that last line. Warms the heart. :)

Unknown said...

Yeah, there's no way he gave up. People that go to such lengths don't do so easily. They better be careful!

Allyson Carter said...

Such a tender scene.

Anonymous said...

Awww, what a sweetheart line from him in the end. Love his logic, but I can understand her paranoia. Great snippet.